If You Come Around On Friday

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OhShir	If You Come Around On Friday	Lead	[-]
amethyst pen Posts: 1888 (03/09/08 21:36:25) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	*If You Come Around On Friday* So, *If you come around on Friday* *We can walk about my farm* *I've begun to paint the silo* *As the weather's done some harm* *We can climb up to the hayloft* *Pitch some hay into each stall* *Check all the nests for chicken eggs* *Hug the piglets while they're small* *Or,* *If you come around on Friday* *You'll see fields that we have sown* *Alfalfa, barley and soybeans* *You will see how tall they've grown* *We can pause up by the meadow* *Where the skylark sings her tune* *Or walk down to the riverbank* *While away the afternoon* *But,* *If you come around on Friday* *I'll fetch my border collie, Skye* *We'll take the sheep across the road* *Where the grassland hills are high* *We can sit down at the table* *Share some ale and just unwind* *Tell our stories of the city* *And the noise I left behind* *Now,* *If you come around on Thursday…* " I've got to do something-- even if it's wrong!" ~ For Shir visit me and our other poets @ http://allinapen.yuku.com/directory
Willowdown		#1	[-]
sunstone pen Posts: 52 (03/09/08 21:46:17) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	the pigs and collie sound delightful but why do I suspect I might get collared into helping ypu paint that silo... how about Tuesday?
OhShir		#2	[-]
amethyst pen Posts: 1890 (03/09/08 22:06:54) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	O.K. Smarypants~ But all my friends aren't that smart. ...Oh goodie, because on Tuesday we plough the lower forty... by hand, with my mule, Firecracker. Wear your overalls and "comfortable shoes"; oh, wait!~ we may go to the barn, better wear boots. " I've got to do something-- even if it's wrong!" ~ For Shir visit me and our other poets @ http://allinapen.yuku.com/directory
Sugarmuser		#3	[-]
sapphire pen Posts: 57 (03/10/08 00:00:02) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	Sounds like a full day, nice invite ;) not sure I want to help you paint though. Sharon Why take the heart of another and replace it with your own?
RGarfield		#4	[-]
poet's pen Posts: 4105 (03/10/08 14:39:58) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	your exploration of rhyming verse is coming along greatly. I like the narrative style to this. RG Back on Line.. come be a part of http://p198.ezboard.com/ballinapen
Willowdown		#5	[-]
sunstone pen Posts: 59 (03/10/08 17:26:15) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	...Oh goodie, because on Tuesday we plough the lower forty... by hand, with my mule, Firecracker. not entirely sure what this cryptic pronoucement involves but I think I might have to make a rain-check... Say hello to Firecracker from me...
Sabresun		#6	[-]
poet's pen Posts: 7583 (03/10/08 18:06:29) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	Shir mentions the silo very early on doesn't she, it's a subtle ploy I agree. In fact, almsot everything in 'So,' involves work...hmmm I think i'll take 'Or,' or 'But,' seems quite a day to me. "Or, If you come around on saturday be sure to take the whole tour, we'll take the old gate up to the fields happily shovel up fresh manure" Shirl, I'm not keen on the saturday, it's not appealing at all. Really good piece though Shir, your rhymings coming along a treat. I think my favourite stanza is - "Or, If you come around on Friday You'll see fields that we have sown Alfalfa, barley and soybeans You will see how tall they've grown We can pause up by the meadow Where the skylark sings her tune Or walk down to the riverbank While away the afternoon" Matt All in a pen mattclendon.wordpress.com Last Edited By: Sabresun 03/10/08 18:09:48. Edited 1 times.
Nageea		#7	[-]
moonstone pen Posts: 399 (03/10/08 21:38:57) moonstone pen Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	even though I never lived on a farm, you make me want to explore one. You make it all sound so healthy and invigorating. - Take away all the cares and hubris of city life.
Bardforlife	I like this	#8	[-]
ballpoint pen Posts: 4 (03/11/08 12:16:00) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	Good meter. Nice descriptives. Can't wait 'til Thursday! The new, improved Paul Bearer. Now with extra 'added bits' (OK, so its a hernia but it still counts!).
OhShir		#9	[-]
amethyst pen Posts: 1922 (03/22/08 20:21:32) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	Thank you sweet Nageea. I did when I was younger. I recommend it at least once in a lifetime! " I've got to do something-- even if it's wrong!" ~ For Shir visit me and our other poets @ http://allinapen.yuku.com/directory
OhShir		#10	[-]
amethyst pen Posts: 1923 (03/22/08 20:24:42) Reply Quote More My Recent Posts Message Me Connection Blocking Invite Ignore User's Posts	Thank you Bard ... b a r n ... hhmmmm, close, but no ringer! Get it????? Close only counts in horseshoe throwing... ?? Ok. So I thought it was a funny. " I've got to do something-- even if it's wrong!" ~ For Shir visit me and our other poets @ http://allinapen.yuku.com/directory

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