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Posts: 4323 (05/01/08 23:58:19) |
white columns, sky reaching towers hiding narrow lanes lined with flowers thronged streets both path and seat throbbing with a tourist beat there in lies a worldly past a present moment that will not last and a future promising many dreams though all may not be what it seems behind the scenes a hurried lot working on problems others forgot to harried to stop for a meal to them this city has a different feel white columns, sky reaching towers proudly proclaimed "ours"
Last Edited By: RGarfield 05/02/08 00:00:27.
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sapphire pen
Posts: 300 (05/02/08 16:14:29) |
Interesting RG... you really delved into the heart of this scene.
Sharon
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poet's pen
Posts: 8091 (05/02/08 18:34:13) |
I think you've portrayed a great sense of place with this one, Rg, good write
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poet's pen
Posts: 4328 (05/02/08 22:01:39) |
thanks, sharon, I am you stopped by.
Matt, thank you too. Sometimes I am not sure where they come from, the words... It was just there so I typed it. |
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poet's pen
Posts: 8098 (05/02/08 22:52:49) |
Well, that's the best way to write I think.
I particulary like the way you ended the poem with - white columns, sky reaching towers proudly proclaimed "ours" |
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sapphire pen
Posts: 894 (06/30/09 14:23:56) |
Brushing past remembering RG
Sugarmuser
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sunstone pen
Posts: 511 (07/03/09 19:35:57) |
a while back there was a 'reclaim the streets' movement
we need a reclaim our dreams' movenent too! |
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Posts: 8886 (07/03/09 19:49:04) |
That would be a great theme for a poem, Will!
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marbled pen
Posts: 4 (07/05/09 10:38:18) |
Well matched words to image!
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